This is my little writing about the race of my life time. So I was in the tokyo olympics competing for new zealand and I put in my writing what I was thinking about and how I felt in this moment of my life. We write a descriptive piece of writing about me in the olympic. I wasn't actually competing for new zealand I am only ten years old and the distance of the run is just the littlest amount of running it's 100m and in the school that I am in we do a run that goes for 3km and that's more than tripling the amount of running that we do at school.Thats my writing so what do you think I can improve on?
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